Last night several of us once again endured high temperatures to attend the Tuesday meeting. No doubt the sunshine contributed to the slight reduction in our usual numbers! Also, a warm welcome to Melissa, who attended her first meeting last night. We look forward to reading her fiction soon!
On with the critiques:
Kate presented the first chapter of an untitled YA sci-fi novel set on Mars.
Everybody liked the great detailed descriptions and the Martian setting (seriously, who doesn’t like Mars?) There was praise for the funny moments in the story and the character of “Magic”, the cut-price Martian tour operator. However, some felt that the secondary characters of Minty and Sapphire were introduced too early. Also, the protagonist’s brother is yet to come across as a character in his own right. But people liked the murder mystery plot and the double (!) cliffhanger ending of this first chapter.
Peter submitted a short story titled “Mid-Space”.
People praised the nice writing of this piece. The protagonist’s conversation with his incompetent ship’s A.I. was generally thought to be very funny. Some logic questions: exactly how fast is light speed? Would Apple computers exist in the far future? Would a futuristic A.I. really be that incompetent? Some calls to raise the stakes and to turn the “down ending” into an “up ending”. But there was universal praise for the theme and that by the end of the story Duncan just wants to be friends with his A.I. Awww.
Rob submitted the first chapter of his fantasy novel, “Necropolis”.
Everybody liked this piece. There was universal praise for the idea of mixing zombies with fantasy. Defoe and Romanitas were alluded to. Some minor anachronisms were pointed out. People also had mixed emotions toward the protagonist. Some felt she was too mean and unsympathetic. Others felt that she was interesting enough and that she will (hopefully) grow as the story continues. Some also liked the reversal of gender expectations. There was a little less enthusiasm for Heimel, who was felt to be a much weaker character. Everyone praised the horrible, bleak setting. Although maybe being based in Manchester had something to do with that!
Finally, Eric submitted three short flash fiction pieces.
People thought the “Eyes of Hera” was funny, but the punchline was a bit too convoluted and difficult to grasp. Some difference of opinion over felt the one-sided conversation of the narrator. Some suggested the writer go full-on Tweedpunk. More people liked “Little Green Men” and the really mean last line ! Finally, “How the Ghost of You Clings” got the most praise, although some wanted more backstory for the protagonist, and there were calls to drop the line “Inconceivable” with its callbacks to The Princess Bride. Fair enough.
Afterwards we all went to Common, which was unusually quiet (until we got there) and talked about Literary Festivals, Finland, fistfights and, of course, our upcoming anthology!
Next meeting: Wednesday 14th September. So, thanks to the quirkiness of our calendar, there’s plenty of time to get your subs in!