Wednesday Meeting: 9th November

We had a big turnout this week and only got through four of the five pieces.

Also, consider this your bi-monthly reminder that we are accepting submissions for our next Anthology. We have yet to receive any submissions from group members so get scribbling!

Chris:

Chris presented a flash piece called luck of the draw.

  • There were lots of positive comments about the strong philosophical edge in the piece.
  • The group seemed to be split on length. Does it need to be longer or does it work as flash?
  • Some confusion over what the setting was. Some members mistakenly believed it was a casino rather than a luck mine.
  • A few questions over the info-dumpy bit at the end.
  • Had all the usual positives of a strong voice, very readable and slick dialogue.

the-luck-factory

Ezeiyoke:

Ezeiyoke presented the start of a piece called ‘Guardian’.

  • Lots of nice comments about the folkloric some comments over the nice imagery.
  • Some confusion over the language. Large sentences and long paragraphs seemed a bit long and clunky for some.
  • Some comments that the king’s sexual arousal scene came out of nowhere. Others found this to be a nice twist.
  • Some comments that there were too many descriptions of the protag looking towards his wife.

king

Luke

Luke presented the first part of a novelette called ‘All The Things That End’.

  • Lots of comments about the prologue with the verdict edging towards it not being necessary. Can we just start in the stable?
  • Lots of positive comments about the world and believable setting.
  • Some questions over the Western elements. Does it sometimes veer towards Cliché? Differing opinions on this.
  • Some nice comments about the quality of the dialogue.

cowboy

Tom:

Tom presented another chapter from his novel An End To Forever

  • Lots of praise for the quality of writing in this piece. Some top notch world building as usual.
  • The array of different creatures is great fun.
  • Some questions over the amount of characters and the flitting between different worlds. Some comments that only reading a couple of chapters a month means it is hard to keep track of everything.
  • Some call’s for the buildings and the land to be made more vivid. Some found the large wonderful structures difficult to picture.

half-bird-half-human

We all nipped off to the pub afterwards for a few slugs of grog and a chat. Topics of conversation centred around the election across the pond (you know? The one that wasn’t at all in the news?).

Next meeting is Tuesday the 22nd November. See you there!

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